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Some people think the best option is to accept a difficult situation, such as having a job they do not enjoy or not having enough money. Others believe it is better to try to make such situations better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

I believe that doing something you don't like every
day
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 will have a huge impact on your daily life, especially if it's at
work
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. Some
people
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 think it's best to accept it.
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 others suggest
is
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trying
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 to try and make
such
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 situations better. In
this
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 essay, I'll explain both points and give examples from my own knowledge and give my opinion
at the end
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Firstly
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, one's attitude and
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actions
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 can change very quickly, so it's important to solve any personal problem.
For instance
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, stressing about a job they hate doing, which they may do bad at it, and it shifts their mood instantly. The best possible choice
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 is to resign and find another job or another place.
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, your mood will change significantly for the better and you're
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 will become smoother.
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, being happy is important for your health, and you'll be way more confident.
Secondly
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, not changing something you dislike doing or seeing every
, will
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 have a huge impact on your daily life.
For example
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, not being motivated to
work
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 or to wake up for
work
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.
Thus
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, you'll be late for
work
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 and may be deducted from your paycheck.
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, from my own knowledge, your whole
day
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 will be ruined, and you will want to be alone all the time.
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, your relationship with other
people
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 will start to decline, which leads to
people
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 ignoring you most of the time.
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, not changing a daily difficult situation will have an impact on your daily life, which leads to depression.
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, if one decides to change the problem,
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 your whole
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 will level up and meeting
people
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 will be a fun interaction.
Finally
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, one must find a solution for any kind of problem.

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planning
Plan what to say. Give two reasons for each view and end with your own clear view.
linking
Use simple link words to show flow, like first, also, but, so.
structure
Keep ideas simple and connect them well. Try to have one main idea per sentence and link them.
content
Give clear, real examples from life or work to back your point.
content
You state a view clearly and end with a closing idea.
organization
You use a real life example to back your points.
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