Đề 1: Many company sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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many

people

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think that by a

brand

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sponsoring a

sport

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, the

brand

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will be

asociated

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associated

with only the

sport

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and not actually what it is about, I agree that by sponsoring a type of

sport

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, the

compony

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company

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gets more advantages, because the

brand

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will get more buyers

which

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, which

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results in more

income

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. On the one hand, if a

brand

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sponsors a

sport

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, it may result in only the

brand

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being

recognized

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because of the

sport

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and not what it is actually about. When a

brand

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being

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apply

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the front sponsor of a type of

sport

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then

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when

people

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see the

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brand

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brand,

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they think only of the

sport

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, because

that is

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what shows every time they watch

this

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specific

sport

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, but that may result in the

sport

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overtaking the

companies

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base meaning. As an example, in the

sport

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Formula 1, a car

brand

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Mclaren

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McLaren

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sponsors the

team

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Mclaren

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McLaren

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, which is the top

team

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in 2025, and that results in making the

company

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know

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mostly for the Formula

one

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team

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and car and not that it actually is a car

brand

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that makes normal cars.

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, if a

brand

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is becoming

know

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, because of

people

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watching the

sport

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, it may result in more buyers and more

income

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. When

people

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watch a

sport

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and all the time some type of

brand

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comes up on the screen and the

brand

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is worn by the

peoples

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favorite

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player, the public will get interested in the

brand

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and start to buy it more, which leads to the

company

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getting more money. As an example, the

brand

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Tommy Hilfiger started to get more

income

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, because in the

sport

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Formula

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of Formula

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1, one of the top

drivers

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drivers,

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Lewis

Hamilton

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Hamilton,

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wore

this

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brand

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, because his

team

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was sponsored by it, and the

company

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attracted more buyers, because of it. I think

that is

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a good way for a

brand

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to grow and become bigger than

what

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apply

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was

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before. By sponsoring a

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sport

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sport,

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it can lead to the

company

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losing its original identity, but it can

also

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lead to the

company

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becoming wealthier than originally, and

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think

that is

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the goal of a good

company

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to grow as an industry and

also

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grow in

income

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grammar

Fix long sentences. Use short, clear lines to make your point easy.

structure

Make a plan before you write. Put a clear intro with a thesis, then two body parts, then a strong ending.

content

Add more detail to each idea. Show how your example backs your view.

coherence

Use simple linking words to move from one idea to the next, like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.

mechanics

Capitalize I and the start of a sentence. Check spelling of common words.

structure

You discuss both sides before giving your view.

content

You use real world examples from sport to support the point.

content

Your reader can see your main idea in the first line.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

370 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sponsor
advertisement
funding
commercialization
community
athletic event
brand awareness
long-term loyalty
athletes
over-commercialization
purity of the competition

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Đề 1: Many company sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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People are living longer. Some people think that it causes big problems. Others, however, think that ageing population has many advantages for business, government and for society in general. Discuss both views and give your own option.

Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?