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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree.

A large proportion of society claims that the only important factor to be successful in business is to produce a new commodity. From my perspective, I disagree.
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 being first is important, the quality of goods or services is much more critical.
To begin
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 with, if people start a unique
company
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 and manufacture a unique commodity, they will gain a large part of the share
market
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. They attract numerous new individuals and make a lot of money. They do not typically need advertising because they are the only available option for others.
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, in the past, Motorola was a successful
company
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. They sold many phones because they were the only option.
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, loyal shoppers are vital. Most new companies find a fresh group of people. If the customers receive good service, they will prefer to do more shopping there.
On the other hand
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, the quality of the products is a critical factor in selecting them. If a
company
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 makes a product better than others, people will pay attention to that product.
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, they will sell their product and gain a share of the
market
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.
In addition
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, cost is another vital factor. A
company
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 which produces an output at a lower
price
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 and sells it at a cheaper
price
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. Most shoppers consider it a serious selection.
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, China uses
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 trick to gain a large share of the
market
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. They produce at a low
price
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 and sell it in the global
market
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 at a lower
price
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 than others.
To conclude
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, a unique business idea is a genius path of starting a business;
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, it is not necessary. Focusing on the other aspects of products,
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 as good quality and
price
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, is more impactful.

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Be clear early. Say your view in one line at the start.
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Add ideas that fit your view and say why they matter.
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Give one clear example for each idea and explain it.
coherence
Make links between ideas with simple words like and, but, also, however.
coherence
Have a short intro that shows the topic and your view, and a short end that restates it.
coherence
Each part should talk about one main idea.
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The writer shows a clear view.
coherence
Examples are used to back points.
coherence
There is some link word use to move from one idea to the next.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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