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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the mostprominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead toEnglish becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

In the modern
world
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, someone said that the development of
torism
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tourism
 made English the
language
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 of the
world
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. So I can't help
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but imagine
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 a
world
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 where everyone speaks the same
language
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.
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 idea presents a mix of significant advantages and considerable drawbacks
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 be easily seen. On the positive side, the benefits will be
fasnating
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fascinating
. Global communication will become the reality,
the
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and the
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language
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 barriers
before
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in international business and travel
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will
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 fade. Scientific research would be
more easily
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easier
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 to spread
away
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apply
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, so knowledge could be shared easily without translation delays or misunderstandings.
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boost global communication and economic development.
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, social and cultural exchanges would be more direct
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;
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 countries don't need to pay lots of money on translation services. So many
uncessary
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unnecessary
 disputes on
language
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 will not come again.In one
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, if there is only one
language
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, people's
life
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lives
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 will absolutely be more convenient.
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, the disadvantages are
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 great. The most significant loss would be cultural diversity.
Language
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 is not just a tool for communication.
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,
languages
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symbolize
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 a
cultrue's
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culture's
 history and identity. The different pronunciation and the letters are both great human heritages, like the
literacture
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literary
 works. Meanwhile, the tradition behind the
languages
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, which may prove the existence of some ancient
cultures
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cultures,
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 could
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 be found in different
languages
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.
Languages
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 are keys for us to link the past and the future. The single
language
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 will let our logic become more monotonous. In conclusion,
while
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 a single global
language
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 will
take
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bring
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 great efficiency and convenience, it threatens the variety of human culture that makes our
world
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 so unique. The price of ultimate convenience might be the loss of our collective heritage.

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task response
Make your view clear in the opening and restate it in the end.
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Give more specific ideas or examples to back each point.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas are linked, for example: also, but, however, so.
coherence
Give a calm and steady flow. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar to make the writing easier to read.
structure
Split the essay into four parts: intro, two body paragraphs (one for good things, one for bad), and a short conclusion.
task response
The topic is clear and you talk about both sides.
coherence
There are paragraphs for pros and cons, which helps a reader.
coherence
You use some link words that help flow a little.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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