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Band 2.5

In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is important for people. What might be the case? Do you think this is a negative or positive situation?

For
somes
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some
 countries that
perfect
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prefer
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 enjoying
life
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than
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over
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 earning money,
owining
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owning
 a
house
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 is more significant than renting one. Buying a
house
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cost
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costs
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 more money in
short
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the short
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time
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term
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,
while
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 it is more stable in
a
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the
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 long term. When it comes to the reasons, the social ideas and financial development
matters
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matter
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.
For example
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, in traditional Chinese concepts
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, owing
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owing
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owning
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 a
house
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 is the symbol of safety and
stabilization
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stability
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. It has become one of the most crucial goals in
life
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 for Chinese
people
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. As a country
depended
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dependent
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 on
argiculture
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agriculture
, owning steady
plowland
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ploughland
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 and houses has been the common understanding.
Also
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, when the social
economics
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economy
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increasing
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increases
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, owning the whole
house
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is
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becomes
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 more available for
people
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.
By contrast
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, if the finance
keep
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keeps
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downturning
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turning down
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 and
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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people
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 find it difficult to earn money, owning the whole
house
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seen
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seems
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needlss
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needless
.
Recently
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Recently,
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 a phenomenon has emerged that the young tend to rent
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house
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houses
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 more often because of the increasing
life
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stressure
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stress
. As for the young
people
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, they showcase
the
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apply
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independence and disagreement
to
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with
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 traditional ideas,
such
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 as getting married and purchasing a
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house
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house,
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 when facing the challenges of economic downturn. In conclusion, the tendency to own a
house
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 is a positive situation, which can reflect the
motivative
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motivational
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 and optimistic attitude of
life
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 and
promoting
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promote
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the
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apply
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economic growth. Considering the
economical
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economic
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 development,
house
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 prosperity
transation
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transaction
 plays an important role in promoting the consumption around the world.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Say your view in the intro, then give two clear ideas with simple examples.
grammar
Use grammar that is easy and correct. Be careful with plurals, verb forms, and linking words.
lexical
Use common, clear words. Avoid hard spellings or wrong words that you do not know well.
content
Give more concrete examples to back each idea.
content
The essay shows a clear idea that owning a home can be seen as important.
coherence
There are some linking words and a basic structure that show some coherence.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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