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Writing Samples
Band 2

This picture below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram illustrates the process of tomato ketchup production.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 it is quite a lengthy process. It
consist
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consists
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 of 15 main stages, starting from collecting fresh
tomato
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tomatoes
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 from trees and ending with
use
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using
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it
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them
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 in our meals. First of all, the workers picked tomatoes and put them in a large basket
and
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, and
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then
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 they
work
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worked
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 carefully and sorted
good
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the good
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 and bad tomatoes.
Next,
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send the good tomatoes to the factory where removed
skin
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of skin
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, stalk, and seeds
form
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from
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 each one and put them in a big container to
crushed
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crush
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 them and become liquid.
Following
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this
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,
adding
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add
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 sugar, vinegar, and salt,
then
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boiling
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boil
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 all in another container. In the next stage, turn off the first and
removed
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remove
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 the cover,
leaved
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leave
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 them
about
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for about
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 two hours.
Next,
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poured the cold ketchup into bottles.
Then
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, labelling them with the details.
Subsequently
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, the workers make sure from quality. In the final stages, bottles are packed into
box
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boxes
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, which are
subsequently
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 delivered to supermarkets for sale and become ready to use
it
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apply
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with
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fries.

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task response
Use one clear intro and one short end. Start with what the diagram shows and end with a short line on what it is used for.
coherence
Put the steps in strict order: first, next, after that, finally. Use small link words to help the flow.
grammar
Fix form and noun use. Say 'consists of', 'tomatoes', 'crush', 'left', 'bottles', etc.
lexis
Keep the words simple and the sentences short. Use only easy words and short best phrases.
content
Watch facts. Do not say tomatoes come from trees unless you are sure the diagram says so.
coherence
The text uses an order of steps.
task
The opening shows what the diagram is about.
structure
Link words like first, next, then help the flow.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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