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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the news in newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of
people
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 have the conclusion that reading or watching
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news
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the news
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 is wasteful, and because of that,
people
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 are showing an irrelevant opinion. From my point of view, as a
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teenager,
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 do not enjoy knowing any type of
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 because nowadays, the internet and what happens in general is not very true.
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Firstly
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, one positive trend might be the impact of
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civilasation
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civilisation
. Imagine that the information put in programs can get
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 sensitive, so a lot of children or
adults
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adults,
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 as
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 suffer or tend to get afraid of something that may not be true because we never know
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apply
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or
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who to trust.
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: once, when
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 was around 8 years old,
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 saw on
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TV information about
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 dangerous game and that many kids got into big problems. Of course that later
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 found that nothing really happened
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 since
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 ,when it comes to playing games on a
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 remember that night which traumatised me a bit.
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, one negative point is that many adults are addicted to knowing what happens in the world because of some
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interests
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being worried
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 the future or maybe just one of their habits is the reason
people
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 want to know everything. Despite all the things mentioned above, A big majority think that
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 ''
news
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 thing'' helps
people
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 in some way,
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 as avoiding
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 or knowing what politicians do, but in fact nobody observes how
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 is a brainwash to
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 real problems.
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: when the Ukraine War just started, everyone got so scared because of
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news
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.
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,
as
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 everybody, my family was so stressed that we all had
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 suitcase prepared in case of trouble. Obviously that everything went well
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, and
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this
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 whole War situation is a mask covering the big bomb we do not know yet.
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, most humans have a very high opinion
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 knowing all the
news
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,but for me personally,
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 agree that
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 has no connection to our lives and what we do
everyday
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. It seems that if we try to live without knowing much, we tend to be happier
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, and
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 totally agree because our life is like a blooming flower and if we do not take care of it with love ,
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 will not be as beautiful as
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 was
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, and
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so
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neither
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 as we.

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task response
Task response: State your view clearly at the start. Then give 2 or 3 clear reasons. End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Coherence: Use a clear plan. Have four parts: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion. Each paragraph has one main idea. Use linking words like first, also, but, so, finally.
language
Language: Use simple grammar. Short sentences help. Check spelling and capital letters. Avoid long, hard sentences.
strength
You use a real voice and your feelings show in the writing.
strength
You give some examples to back up your points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Informed
  • Current events
  • Public awareness
  • Local news
  • Global issues
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Bias
  • Community
  • Public safety
  • Health advisories
  • Market trends
  • Traffic updates
  • Weather forecasts
  • Educate
  • Raise awareness
  • Opinion formation
  • Decision making
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