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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

It is argued that investing and saving money for the far future is extremely essential for everybody, and it is equally crucial for younger individuals.
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 essay totally agrees with the statement because
this
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 idea will benefit their
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’s quality and improve every aspect, and it will result in their academic
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 when they grow up.
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Forcing
 the youngest to keep some of their allowance aside has a major impact on their college experience. Having the ability to pay for the university’s tuition is not easy for
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amount
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number
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 of households
particularly
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to
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low income
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 families.
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, it wouldn’t be fair for others who are intelligent but can’t afford it.
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, if
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their
 children save
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 it will give them the opportunity to study in a
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prestigious
 and
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well known
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one
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that
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 will later result in their occupation that will more likely make them wealthy.
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, Harvard
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 has recently reported that 30% of their students got in by saving money their whole
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. Another reason is
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 has on the individual’s
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 is totally
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beneficial
 and vital. Being taught something at a young age is ten times more effective than
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gaining
 it when you are older.
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, the lessons that it teaches you will stick with you forever. It will teach children the greatest principle of
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wich
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 is making
discesions
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decisions
 wisely
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 they will have to choose between fun
or
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and
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 being
discplined
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disciplined
 to their goal and achieve it by
minimizing
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minimising
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 their
spendings
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spending
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.
According to
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 survey conducted in
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 USA, around 40% of children who follow
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 trend grow
uo
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up
 to be wiser than those who did not.

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organization
Plan before you write. Make a plan with an intro that shows your view, then two body parts each with one main idea, and a short ending.
language
Check your spelling and grammar. Fix mistakes like Fosting, persteigous, discplined, and others.
content
Use real and simple examples you can explain clearly. Make sure facts you use are true or stated as opinion.
content
The writer gives a clear view that saving money is good for young people.
structure
Some reasons are given about how saving can help with college and life choices.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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