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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of only having one language in the world? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Although
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 globalisation helps the spread of the global
language
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, many people think that having
one
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language
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 in the world will be beneficial.
While
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 using
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language
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 offers several benefits, it
also
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 has disadvantages, and
this
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 essay will explain both arguments.
One
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 of the advantages is convenience. Everyone can talk easily without worrying about misunderstanding in translation.
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, if English becomes the only global
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, someone who wants to go to South Korea does not have to learn Hangul and the Korean
language
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 to buy something in a local market. They can just use English because everyone in that country speaks and uses English as well.
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 means that there are no boundaries to cross and develop themselves around the world.
On the other hand
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,
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also
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 gives some drawbacks,
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 as there is no more uniqueness about the country, both in
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 and cultures.
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, Hangul is originally a word-form from Korea
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 these words
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 form the Korean
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. Because of
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, most people easily know Korean by just seeing the
language
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.
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, if all countries use
one
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language
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, it makes the original
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 of
this
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 country slowly fade and
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 be lost.
This
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 actually happens in ancient countries like Latin and Greek because there are no
one
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 speaks
this
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language
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 anymore. In conclusion,
while
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 using
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language
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 is beneficial for someone who wants to travel the world without
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 worries about the lack of
language
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, it
also
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 has disadvantages by losing the country’s originality. Whether people prefer the pros and cons, it is depends on their preferences and viewpoint.

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grammar
Fix small grammar to make meaning clear. For example, use 'no one speaks this language anymore' and 'will fade away' instead of 'going to be lost'.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start each paragraph with a clear main point in a short sentence.
content
Give a bit more detail for each point. Add one or two simple facts or small ideas to show why it is true.
cohesion
Use simple joining words to show how ideas are linked, like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however'.
content
The essay shows both sides of the topic.
content
There is a real example about travel to a country.
structure
The essay ends with a clear conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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