Some people think that working from home is more beneficial for employees, while others believe that it makes them less productive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People
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have two opinions
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about
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work
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,
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few
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a few
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individuals argue that working from
home
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has more advantages,
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however
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others feel that it makes
people
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more lethargic. I partly agree with
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view.
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with,
people
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who
work
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at
home
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feel more comfortable
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, like
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like
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as
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they wake up as per the
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stat
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start
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time
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and
more
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are more
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involvement
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in the
home
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chores.
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, saves their
time
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as they do not have to
comute
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commute
for
work
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plus
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less
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fewer
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happens
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happen
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.
According to
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the data collected
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during
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the
COVID
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COVID-19
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pandemic
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time
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time,
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people
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have
less
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fewer
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family issues.
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, working from
home
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also
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lessens the traffic congestion, which decreases the number of road collisions
everyday
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every day
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. By working from
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home
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home,
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individuals become more lethargic, like they do not wake up early in the morning,
eating
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develop eating
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disorders and
inappropriate
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adopt inappropriate
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sitting postures.
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, the numbers are more of unhealthy
people
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who
work
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from
home
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according
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, according
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to the data collected in 2024. Not only
this
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but
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, but
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also
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affected
people
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’s
in person
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in-person
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socialization
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and communication skills.
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, they become more
self seeking
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self-seeking
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and ultimately impact
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progression.
To conclude
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that, working from
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has more
advantagous
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advantages
in
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apply
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these days, which saves
people
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time
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and
money
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money,
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although
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it affected
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affected
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affects
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individuals
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individuals'
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life
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lives
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mentally and physically and socially. They have to maintain a balance between everything,
should
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and should
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be more focused on health and
then
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productivity can be enhanced.

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task response
Be clear in your view from the start and keep one main idea. Support it with strong, simple points.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the essay in four parts: intro, two body parts for points, and a conclusion. Use linking words to show how ideas go together.
content
Use specific examples that you can clearly say are true. Do not make up facts. If you mention data, say where it comes from or skip it.
language
Fix grammar and word choice. Use short, simple sentences. Avoid words that are hard or wrong for this topic (like 'eating disorders').
insight
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
coherence
Some linking words are used, which can help flow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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