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some people think computers and the internet are important in childrens study but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinin?

Some individuals believe that electronic devices and the world network can enhance children's ability to gain
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 education. Others incline to think that those who spend their time with teachers in institutions
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tend to gain educational goals more effectively. In
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 I will examine both opinions and try to highlight my own view that consuming time with professors is much better than sole learning. On the one hand, digital tools can significantly
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 the learning experience.
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 access to an enormous amount of up-to-date information, which allows
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 to explore topics in far greater depth than most textbooks can offer.
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, interactive platforms,
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 as educational websites and learning applications, make studying more engaging and help children enhance independent learning skills.
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, many
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 use online courses to revise difficult subjects or to learn at their own pace, which can be especially useful for those who struggle in a traditional classroom.
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, colleges and tutors play an essential role that technology cannot fully replace. Teachers do not simply deliver information; they
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 explain complex concepts, monitor
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' progress and provide immediate feedback.
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 personal guidance helps youngsters correct their mistakes and stay motivated.
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, university is a social environment where
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 learn to cooperate, follow rules and develop communication skills, all of which are difficult to achieve through online learning alone. In conclusion, from my point of
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 the most effective approach is to integrate technology into traditional education
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 choose one over the other. Gadgets and the Internet should be used as powerful tools to support classroom teaching, not as a substitute for human interaction. By combining the strengths of both methods, adolescents are more likely to achieve better academic results and become more adaptable learners.

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language
Try to use clear and simple words, and fix small grammar errors. Make your ideas plain and easy to read.
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Make a clear view in the end. State your own view early and keep it in the last line.
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Add more real examples. Say how tech helps in class, and how teachers help in person.
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Use good join words to connect ideas to help the flow from one part to the next.
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The essay talks about both sides well.
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It uses clear sign words like On the one hand and On the other hand and In conclusion.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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