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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the changes in a
park
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 from 1980 to today. It can be clearly seen that the
park
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 was divided into two parts in the past, but now it has been divided into four parts. In 1980, the
park
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 had two places and one line for walking. In one place, there are some trees and a big green space. It took three corners of the
park
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 square. As regards the other space, it took just
a
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the
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 bottom left corner. It has four chairs around the lake. In terms of now, we can notice that the second part at the bottom remains steady, but with a smaller capacity and just three chairs.
In addition
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, there are two new places.
First,
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it is a court for soccer in the right bottom
park
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.
Second,
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it is on the right above the
park
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 for children.
Furthermore
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, it has some games and trees. Regarding
fourth
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the fourth
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 field, it was replaced by a big green area.

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task-response
Have a clear start that says what the map shows. Then tell the changes in order. End with a short note.
task-response
Use facts from the map. Say two parts and four parts, seats, trees, lake.
coherence
Use simple link words: first, next, then, and now to join ideas.
grammar
Watch the grammar. Use the right tense and plural on nouns.
coherence
Check each part before you move to the next. Do not mix ideas.
strength
The essay tries to show old and new map parts.
strength
There is a clear order in the write up.
strength
It uses words that show place and size together with order.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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