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Band 6.5

The given table provides vital data about the amount of fast food consumed in Melbourne from 2005 to the present time and predictions for the near future.

The table presents the intake of fast
food
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 in
Melbourn
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Melbourne
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 between 2005
to
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and to
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 present time and
also
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 the predictions for 2025.
Overall
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, hamburgers through all three of the given periods stay as the most consumed
food
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;
however
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, salad has the biggest increase in the number. Focusing on 2005 and
present
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the present
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 time, all of the given foods have an increase in the number. Fried rice and
noodels
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noodles
,
who
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which
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 in 2005 had the lowest number of 6, only increased to
a
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apply
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9 and 8, respectively.
On the other hand
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, hamburger, which was the
top eaten
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top-eaten
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food
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, decreased by 2
units
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, going from 40 to 38, but the second
top
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top-eaten
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food
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which
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, which
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 was fried
chicken
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chicken,
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 increased by 2
units
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 from 35 to 37. Salad
having
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, having
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 the biggest growth from 5
units
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 to 15, still remained the third in data. As for 2025,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fried chicken
still will
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will still
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 remain
as
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apply
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the highest consumed, the former growing to 51
units
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 and the latter to 45.
However
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, fried rice will stay at the same amount as before, with 9
units
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, but
noodels
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noodles
adding
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will add
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 one unit more, making it 9. The
food
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 having the biggest increase is
goint
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going
 to be salad, growing more than double the amount as before, making it 41.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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