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Some people think that exercise is the key to health , while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important . Dicsuss both views and give your opinion

Many
people
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 think that
exercise
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 is the key to
health
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 ,
while
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 others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. In my
opinion
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i
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I
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 do agree that sports
plays
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play
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 a major role in
humans
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human
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health
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. Some
people
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 see that
excerising
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exercising
 does nothing
with
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for
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there
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their
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health
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,
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.
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Mostly
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this
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 is a miss
information
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misinformation
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people
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 can get from
un trusted
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untrustworthy
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 sites like
instagram
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Instagram
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 or even
tiktok
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.
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 hospitals and many other trusted websites promote
simple
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that simple
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exercise
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 can step
ups
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up
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people
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people's
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 game
but
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, but
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as
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is
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 known
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people's
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that people's
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 attention can be hard to get.
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, doctors often advise patients to change their diet before starting any
exercise
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 routine, showing the importance of healthy eating. In my opinion, I really do agree that even 20 minutes of
exercise
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 helps in many
way
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ways
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for
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, for
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 example, Walking around the block helps with
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the humans
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humans
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human
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 heart beat or even with mental
health
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.
Thats
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 why
people
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 should
priortize
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prioritise
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exercise's
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exercise
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 in their daily life.And in fact starting
in
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at
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 a young age would
benifit
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benefit
 us as humans when we grow up
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, espically
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espically
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especially
with out
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without
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health
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 and bones. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
i
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I
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 strongly agree that moving around the house or going to the gym plays a big role in
health
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 and serves
alot
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a lot
 of
advanteges
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advantages
.
People
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 really should start
re searching
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researching
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 and
educate
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educating
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 themselves on
this
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 topic from a trusted
websites
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website
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 or even book
a
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an
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appoinmint
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appointment
 with a trusted doctor.
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while
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exercise
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 is important for improving fitness and reducing disease risks, a balanced diet has a stronger influence on long-term
health
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. I believe that the best approach is to combine both healthy eating and regular physical activity.

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language
There are many rules and mistakes in spelling and grammar. It makes ideas hard to see. Focus on grammar and spelling first.
structure
Give a clear plan before you write. Use three big parts: intro, 2 body parts, and a short conclusion.
content
Explain both sides in a fair way and add a clear example for each side.
coherence
Use words that join ideas well, like also, but, however, and for example to show how ideas fit.
vocabulary
Use simple, common words and check spellings to keep the meaning clear.
planning
Plan your write, write a first draft, then check for errors and improve.
structure
The writer talks about both views and ends with a view that both diet and exercise are needed.
content
Some real examples are given, like walking and the doctor’s advice.
structure
There is an attempt to have a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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