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Band 4.5

the diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea

The graph illustrates two different manufacturing
ways
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methods
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 for
a
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black tea. The 5-step
process
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 starts with picking out the right leaves for the manufacturing and ends with drying the
product
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, so the needed things
escapes
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 the
product
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. The
process
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 starts with picking out the right leaves from the ground, which can only be the two top leaves and the bud, because
otherwise
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 the tea will not be at its full value.
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 it is put on a rack where the picked material gets withered
and
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 the air passes through the leaves, taking 60% of the moisture out. At the next
step
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 the
process
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 can differ in two ways, but in the traditional
way
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, which is used for loose tea, the leaves get rolled so they get flat and
brake
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, in which the enzymes are released from the
product
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.
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, the other
way
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 is to do it the modern
way
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, which is better for
teas
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tea
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 in bags.
This
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process
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 is different, because the leaves get cut and torn so that
after
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they can get curled up, and in
this
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way
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way,
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 the manufacturing is faster
and
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 the pieces are smaller.
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continued
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 the same for both methods, and
thats
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 the fermentation. The leaves get spread on cement or tiles, on which the enzymes with air, form the copper colour of leaves. The
last
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 step is to dry the
product
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 in an oven or hot air dry so the flavour and aroma release
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as
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 well as almost all of the moisture escapes.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, product, way with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional method
  • CTC method
  • Manufacturing process
  • Withering
  • Rolling
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Tearing
  • Curling
  • Quality
  • Flavor
  • Aroma
  • Technology advancements
  • Environmental considerations
  • Consumer preference
  • Pricing
  • Tea grade categorization
  • Market implications
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