Some people believe that young people bring more profit to the company. Others says that older people actually bring more profits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is argued that young generations will

beneficial

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be beneficial

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for

company

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to elevate their profits,

while

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other

people

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believe profitable companies hire more

senior level

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senior-level

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employees to achieve their business goals. I believe

these

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apply

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both

group

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groups

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are important for companies, and in

this

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essay I will discuss both

viewponts

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viewpoints

and give my personal opinions about these

issue

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issues

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. On the one hand, older

people

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are beneficial to managerial and

lerdership

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leadership

purposes for

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company

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the company

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A senior

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senior level

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senior-level

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employee has numerous experiences

about

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with

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company's

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the company's

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workflow,

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and also

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also they

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they also

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have a sense of leadership to create a good environment

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company

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the company

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majority

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the majority

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of big

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company

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companies

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in Indonesia

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apply

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they

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apply

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search some professional

mid-high level

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mid-high-level

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managers to

managing

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manage

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and

retaining

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retain

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their

company

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's core businesses.

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hire

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hiring

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a senior employee can save a huge amount of

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company's

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the company's

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fund

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funds

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, because they have many skills, not only managerial, but

also

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technical skills.

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youth

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young

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people

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have more energy to finish many tasks. They have good physical conditions, and they are more connected to the latest technologies

such

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as Artificial

Inteligence

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Intelligence

(AI), or Machine Learning.

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, the biggest start-up

company

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in Indonesia, Gojek

;

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has more

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than 80 per cent of

their employee

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its employees

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are

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who are

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fresh-graduated individuals as Software

Engineer

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Engineers

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and Software

developer

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developers

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. These young

people

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able

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are able

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to develop and run many

usefull

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useful

apps and create a huge

impacts

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impact

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for

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company

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the company

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, especially in profit. In conclusion, older

people

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are important to retain and boost

company

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performances

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performance

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. They have many experiences

to handle

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in handling

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many projects,

although

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they have some limitations

about

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the

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of technologies

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technologies

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technology

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, younger generations are more connected to

latest

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the latest

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technologies, and

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this

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these

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skills are beneficial for

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company

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the company

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koh.manse

Nov 28, 2025

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coherence

Link ideas with small words and clear order. Start a new paragraph for a new idea.

grammar

Check grammar and spelling in each sentence. Use simple verb form and make nouns plural when needed.

content

Give more strong example for each idea and explain how it helps the point.

content

You discuss both sides of the issue.

structure

You state your view in the end.

examples

You use examples from real firms to show ideas.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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270 words

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Innovations
Breakthroughs
Deep industry knowledge
Mentors
Fostering
Workforce balance
Maximizing profits
Enthusiasm
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