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The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005.

The graph gives data about the finances spent on
roads
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 and
transport
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 by governments in Italy, Portugal, the UK and the USA between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, four regions experienced different trends over the time period.
While
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 the amount of
money
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 that was invested in
roads
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 and
transport
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 in Italy, Portugal and the UK gradually decreased, financing for
roads
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 and
transport
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 in the USA
,
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 steadily increased. As the graph shows,in 1990 the
percentage
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 of
money
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 invested for infrastructure improvements was 23%
,
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;
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this
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 figure fell to 20% in 1995,and before decreasing to 18%,
this
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 figure increased to 24%
,
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in 2005 and 2000, respectively.
In contrast
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, the Amount of
money
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 that was invested in
roads
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 and
transport
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 in Portugal
,
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was the highest
percentage
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 among the four regions,with 27% in 1990.From
this
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 point,the
percentage
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 of
money
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 started gradually declining
until
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 20% in 2005. In 1990,
UK
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the UK
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 had the lowest number of invested finance with 10%,
this
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 index fell by 5 per cent in 1995.After rising to 12% in 2000,the index significantly decreased to 8% in 2005.
However
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,
while
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 these regions experienced a decline in the amount of investment
money
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, the USA was the only country that increased the
percentage
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 of
money
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 spent on
roads
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 and
transport
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.In 1990,the
percentage
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 was only 11%
,
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;
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this
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 figure dropped to 10% in 1995,and increased significantly
until
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to
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 15% in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words roads, transport, money, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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