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Band 2.5

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

4.The authors see ABL001 as a way to test “dual inhibition of BCR-ABL1 using distinct targeting mechanisms”, with tighter control of BCR-ABL1 and less room for resistance as the aim.
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 pick out “non-overlapping resistance profiles” for myristoyl site and catalytic site drugs, and they take the view that a pair of them can work as a higher barrier than either drug alone. With support from simple
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 and early phase I signals, they finish by saying that once safe doses are known, ABL001 plus a TKI should be tested to achieve treatment-free remission in patients with CML”.

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task
Make a clear view at the start and end.
style
Use short, plain lines and simple words.
coherence
Link ideas with easy joins like and, but, also, so, because.
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Give a few facts and then state your own view.
support
Add more detail or examples to back each main point.
content
Clear aim is shown in the text.
structure
The flow of ideas is easy to follow.
style
Words stay simple and direct.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental cornerstone
  • literacy and numeracy
  • social inequalities
  • foundation of knowledge
  • social mobility
  • informed and engaged citizenry
  • democratic processes
  • youth crime rates
  • productive activities
  • vocational training
  • workforce
  • stifling individual talent
  • economic contribution
  • stress and mental health issues
  • unsuitable educational system
  • one-size-fits-all approach
  • diverse talents
  • career paths
  • formal academic education
  • financial strains
  • low-income countries
  • improving quality of education
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