University students nowadays have too much freedom and do not study enough. To what extent do you agree and disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and examples.

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is believed that university
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are often distracted from their studies because of the
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they have. I partially agree with
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statement. University
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do enjoy a higher level of
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, and some may not study enough, but many others use
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responsibly.
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,
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can help
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choose their careers on their own. They can become the leaders of their own lives. It helps develop leadership qualities and makes them more confident.
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freedom
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allows young adults to follow their
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and do what they are most interested in.
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a survey conducted by a lifestyle magazine, youngsters are more successful compared to middle-aged individuals.
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survey clearly showed that when university
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take responsibility for their future, they behave more maturely and
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their time in a positive way. They
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set a proper schedule for work and study
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structure
Plan your essay with a clear start, two or three body ideas, and a short end.
task response
State your view in the first line and keep it steady.
examples
Give a strong, simple example and explain it.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas are linked.
language
Check grammar and make each sentence clear and short.
content
You show your view and partly agree.
structure
You give a good point on freedom to choose a career.
examples
You use an example to back your idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • time
  • study
  • work
  • life
  • plan
  • goal
  • choice
  • free
  • class
  • exam
  • grade
  • learn
  • read
  • write
  • think
  • help
  • group
  • library
  • friend
  • job
  • money
  • balance
  • routine
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