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The maps below show how Village Park changed in 8 years.

The two maps illustrate the modifications that took place in Village
Park
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 over
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an 8-years
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8-years
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8-year
 period.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
area
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 experienced significant changes, with more facilities and expansion of
car
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the car
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park
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 and tennis courts.
According to
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 the map, before
8-years
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8 years
this
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 place was quiet, natural, and undeveloped,
while
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 now it has become more
urbanized
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urbanised
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 and modern.
First,
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children’s
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a children’s
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 play
area
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 has been introduced
in
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on
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 the West side, surrounded by trees.
Moreover
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, the small car
park
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 in the Southwest has been extended.
Whereas
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,
entry
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the entry
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 place remained unchanged in the Northern part. An interesting development has been
renovated
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the renovation of
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 the tennis courts to become four courts now. Another notable
modifications
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modification
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 the children’s play
area
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 has been removed to make way for a dividing school and picnic
area
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 in the East section.
Furthermore
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, a small café has been added between
football
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the football
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 pitch and the lake with
few
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a few
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 ducks.
Finally
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,
cycle
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a cycle
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 path with more trees
have
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has
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 been built around the Village
Park
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 now.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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