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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is no denying the fact that planning is the most appropriate way to increase productivity.
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 it is a commonly held belief that working on upcoming plans is a waste of time, there is
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 an argument that
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opposes
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 consider that planning in advance is
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 method in overcoming challenges.
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 with, planning is critical for predicting future endeavours.
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, making plans will eventually lead to
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 the suspicious and hazards that
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 each decision.
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, undoubtedly, it is a great way for personal growth and to invest in yourself
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 that
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 it makes the journey much easier and
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.
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 the
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government
 has planned to reduce
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 on oil and gas resources by announcing the inspirational
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 2030. Another point to consider, it clearly indicates that the sense of
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responsibility
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recommnded
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recommended
 to tackle various concerns. It is
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 habit
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, the awareness and maturity among all members of society will significantly increase.
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, planning ahead will play a crucial role in reducing the costs of harmful outcomes compared with late and procrastination actions.
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 had published a medical
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research
 in 2018,
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 that there was a direct link between planning and mental stability. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I firmly believe that arranging within
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 stages is equally important to concentrating on the present moment.

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task response
State a clear agree or disagree at the start and keep to it.
coherence
Group ideas in one paragraph and use simple, linking words to move from one idea to the next.
accuracy
Fix big spelling mistakes and use plain words. Short, clear sentences help a lot.
content
The writer shows a clear wish to defend planning.
structure
The text tries to use examples from real life.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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