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The table bellows shows the number of motor vehicles per 1000 inhabitants in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.

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The examined chart displays information about motorcycles per 1000 locals in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.
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 ,the country that experienced a dramatic increase in motor
vehicles
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 was Brazil . The sole country
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 a decrease was the Bahamas . The quantity of transport remained the same; there was neither a rise nor a fall . Brazil witnessed a significant uplift in the
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 number of motorcycles between 1990 and 2000 , ranging from 55 to 135,80 . It means that the ratio of
vehicles
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 was more than twice . The figure for motor
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 in the Bahamas was 235 in 1990 ,
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 it decreased by 48
vehicles
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 and reached 157 after a decade .  The rate of motorcycles in Cambodia stood at 1 in 1990 , and
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 proportion plateaued until 2000 , showing no change in the level of
vehicles
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. The other 6 regions had a slight upsurge in the number of
vehicles
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 .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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