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Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school. Why is this? What other skills do you think it is important to be taught in schools?

Some individuals advocate that
students
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 should learn how to speak confidently and perform presentations in
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.
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 technique is going to build their confidence. Critical thinking and
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problem solving
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 are crucial
skills
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 that should be taught to
students
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. Presentations and public speaking are essential for learners in
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. These methods are beneficial for them.
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 will assist
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to build
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 their self-confidence. If they master presentation strategies, they will gain communication
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, being proficient in presentations will extend their knowledge and
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. Public speaking will strengthen their personality and
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, Andrea is a public speaking instructor. Her roles are to facilitate the learners to be self-esteemed and perform speeches properly in front of the audience. Many
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 gained a lot of strategies from
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Andrea. They indicated that
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 course enhances their attitude in an efficient way.
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Problem solving
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 and critical thinking are important
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 that should be learned in
school
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. These
skills
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 will improve
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students
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 scores and performance in their exams. If they implement critical thinking in writing
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 as essays,
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 will enhance their writing level.
Students
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 will be able to write essays or research papers without struggling.
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Problem solving
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 is the best skill to help
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how
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to
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analyze
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 problems and solutions in a smart manner.
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,
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 will make them think analytically in solving
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 tasks.
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, researchers indicate that 75
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 of
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 who think critically can find solutions
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problem
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 questions without any difficulties.
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,
students
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 have to learn about topics related to public speaking and presentation in
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. These are beneficial for them.
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, learning
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 as critical thinking and
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problem solving
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 are necessary for learners.
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 will lead them to perform well in their grades.

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coherence
Improve the flow by making a clear plan. Use one big idea per paragraph and link it with simple words like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
task
Make a clear plan at the start: say what you will discuss, then show how. This will help the reader see the two main asks.
content
Add more clear and simple examples from school life, not just one case.
structure
There is a plan with two main ideas.
coherence
Some link words are used well, like 'however' and 'to conclude'.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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