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In the past, people used to travel abroad to look for manu difference from their home country. Nowadays cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reason? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In the
last
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 few years, pupils used to arrange abroad trip to look for countless differences as compared to their home country, but now
cities
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 are being developed like other nations. I think the reason behind
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 is that most brands are easily findable in their own nation, and the advantages of
this
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 trend outweigh the disadvantages, which helps to learn
time
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 and
money
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 management skills. The main advantage of
cities
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' development is that every brand of clothing and technology-based gadgets is available in
cities
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 and malls
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 because of
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 , employers do not need to spend
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 on huge tourist packages, which leads to saving their
money
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 and
time
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 as well.
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, in India, Apple authorities not only started the production of their gadgets, but
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 set up a retail store in Mumbai, which leads to saving
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 on transportation
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, and
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 GST tax will
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 be reduced,
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 production beginning in India with
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the labelling
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 of made in India.
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, there are some drawbacks
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. Employers
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 who have hectic schedules are not able to give
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 to their family.
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 means to say, pupils are working in multinational companies where they get holidays only to fulfil their requirements. If citizens desire to
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 in their own nations, people will not arrange abroad trip with family.
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, in Canada, the person who works as an accountant in a bank fulfils all
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his
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 desires
of
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himself
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and his children because everything is available in markets, and employers do not take leave for family shopping, which leads to destroying the level of their bonding. In conclusion, citizens used to travel to foreign countries in the
last
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 few years to look
differences
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for differences
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, but
cities
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 are becoming similar to foreign countries. In my point of view, a brand establishes a business , and its advantages will teach two mandatory skills to pupils , like
money
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 and
time
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 arranging habits.

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