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These days many people prefer online shopping to conventional shopping. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, an increasing number of people prefer online shopping to traditional shopping.
Although
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this
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 trend offers several advantages, it
also
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 presents certain drawbacks. Both sides will be discussed in the following paragraphs. One major advantage of online shopping is the wide availability of
products
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 from across the globe.
Due to
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 globalisation, consumers can easily purchase items from any part of the world without physically visiting a store.
For example
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, websites
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 as Amazon and Shein allow
customers
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 to order a variety of
products
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 and have them delivered directly to their homes, saving time and effort.
In addition
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, online shopping contributes to the economy by encouraging international trade and creating business relationships between countries. Another benefit is that online platforms frequently offer discounts and promotional deals, which help
customers
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 save money.
On the other hand
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, there are some disadvantages associated with online shopping. The biggest concern is the risk of scams and fraud. Many
customers
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 experience issues
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 as receiving damaged, incorrect, or poor-quality
products
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. In some cases, the item delivered does not match the one shown online, which leads to frustration. Another drawback is the lack of
personal
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 shopping experience. Visiting physical stores allows buyers to inspect
products
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, ask questions, and support local businesses.
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,
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 the popularity of online shopping, many small shops struggle to attract
customers
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. In conclusion,
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 online shopping offers convenience, wider product choices, and cost savings, it
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 carries risks
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 as fraud and the decline of local markets. With careful precautions, I believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and online shopping will continue to grow in popularity.

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Make both sides in the body more even. Add one real life example to prove a point.
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Use clear links like and, but, so to join ideas and flow from one sentence to the next.
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End with a short clear view and a quick wrap up of main points.
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Check small mistakes in spelling and grammar to raise score.
structure
Clear plan with intro, body, and end.
content
Good use of real sites as examples.
coherence
Some good links to join ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transnational problems
  • climate change
  • ozone layer depletion
  • pollution
  • collaborative efforts
  • pooling of resources
  • expertise
  • technology
  • innovative solutions
  • international standards
  • race to the bottom
  • environmental standards
  • capacity
  • impacts
  • national sovereignty
  • independently
  • economic
  • social contexts
  • international consensus
  • legal
  • political systems
  • enforcement
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