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Band 2.5

Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals consider that innovative communication tools have certain flaws that negatively affect social interaction. I mostly agree with
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 opinion because
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face
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 connections are very important.
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while
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 I accept that modern technology can cause some drawbacks, there are
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 several advantages to consider. First and foremost, technology allows
people
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 to contact each other over long distances. You can communicate with a friend even if they are not in the same city or
evne
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even
 the same country as you.
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 reason is increased productivity. In the past
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people
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, people
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 often struggled to meet each other at a scheduled time.
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 if individuals agreed to meet, the next day they had to be very precise. If something happened on the
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 it would be impossible to inform each other
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 they could arrive at different times and miss the whole meeting. Modern communication tools prevent
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 situations
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 quick updates.
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hand
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 strongly agree with the negatives of modern gadgets .
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 first reason is
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face
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 connections. Current researches demonstrate that meeting
people
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 only online can
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deteriorate
people
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’s speech ability when it comes to
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 in
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 conferences .
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conclusion
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 am supporting the idea that
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 have to use their communication gadgets just as tools to meet with somebody in real life .

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structure
Plan a clear view in one line for the essay, then add two reasons with one example each.
language
Use topic sentence for each paragraph and short, clear sentences. Pay to keep capital letters and full stops.
content
Add more real life examples and explain how they show the point.
content
The essay shows a clear view that technology can have both sides.
language
The writer uses some good connect words like 'First and foremost' and 'On the other hand'.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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