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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different iters in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table depicts
consumer's
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consumers'
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 expenditure on five different items in five European countries in the year 2002.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the figures for
food
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the food
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/ drink / tobacco
category
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 were higher compared to other groups. In 2002, the highest proportion of money was spent on food,drink and tobacco, with
Turkey
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 and Ireland leading the table. Both the countries had values, which
was
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were
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 28.91% and 32.14%
repsectively
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respectively
.
Meanwhile
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 the figures ranged between 15% to 18% for Italy, Spain and Sweden. Footwear and Clothing
was
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were
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 the second most popular
category
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, with Italians spending the highest amount
equaling
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, equaling
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to
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apply
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9%.
While
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 Ireland, Spain,
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Turkey
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and Turkey
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spend
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spent
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 similar
percentage
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percentages
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 of money on these commodities
which
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, which
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was
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were
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 around 6 %, Sweden spent the least
which
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, which
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 was 5%. The sector in which the least shares were invested was Leisure and Education. In
this
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category
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,
Turkey
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 spent the highest figures;
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however
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however,
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 it was not more than 4%. Followed by
Turkey
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, were Italy and Sweden having a difference of 1% from it,
while
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 Ireland and Spain
the
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had the
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 least amount of money in
this
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category
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 (1%- 2%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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