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Band 4.5

The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Government should discourage people from constantly buying up-to-date or fashionable products. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Natural
resources
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 are being consumed faster than they can be regenerated in the
world
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, so it is important to make products that can
last
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 a long time, which means that
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government
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the government
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 should discourage
people
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 from constantly purchasing fashionable and up-to-date products. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement and because
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the resources
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resources
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resource
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 issue has become serious and can hurt everyone's
interest
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interests
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, and
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government
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the government
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 has the ability to announce and force
people
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 to save natural
resources
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. Lack of natural
resources
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 and inefficient
recycle
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recycling
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 system can be seen around the
world
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, starting to
influence
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people
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's daily life. As the
world
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 population increases, more and more natural
resources
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, like trees, fuel,
water
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and water
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resource
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resources
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, are needed
for
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to
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 improve
people
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's daily life.
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, the
recycle
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recycling
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 system in the
world
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 is not efficient enough to offset the cost, which results in a lack of
resources
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 around the
world
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.
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, some
people
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 in Africa can not get drinkable water. At the same time, lots of water
resource
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resources
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 in many developed countries
is
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are
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 being
wasting
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wasted
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 without control, and
inefficient
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an inefficient
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recycle
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recycling
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 system makes
this
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 situation even worse.
Givernments
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Governments
 are usually powerful enough to
influence
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citizents'
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citizens'
 opinion, which can be very helpful when it comes to discouraging
people
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 from buying too
much
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many
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 fashionable products.
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Government
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The government
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 can make schools teach students the importance of buying new things, and save natural
resources
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 by setting new standards, which can start to
influence
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people
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 when
are
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they are
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 still young.
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,
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government
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the government
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 can
influence
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 adults by expressing the opinion of saving
resources
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 online, and blocking the opposite news or opinion
in
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on
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 the internet, which is something that a common company or individual can not do.
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, the Chinese
government
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 had set a new rule for schools, which aimed
on encouraging
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to encourage
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 students
having
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to have
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 a habit of saving
resources
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. In conclusion, I strongly agree with
this
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 statement, because the issue of lack of natural
resources
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 is harmful, and
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government
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the government
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 does have enough power to
influence
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 and
make
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encourage
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people
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saving
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to save
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resources
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.

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task
State your view clearly in the first sentence.
structure
Give each idea a clear reason and one simple example.
coherence
Use small linking words so ideas go well from one to the next.
content
The writer takes a clear position.
examples
Some examples are used to back points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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