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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The line graph demonstrates the amount of
income
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 generated in
million
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dollars
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 from garment
export
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exports
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 in the three chosen countries, from the
year
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 1999 to 2003.
Overall
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, Colombia and Japan
dispayed
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displayed
 a fluctuating trend
with
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apply
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corresponding
each
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to each
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 other with
comparitively
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comparatively
 more stable
income
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,
whereas
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 Myanmar
dispayed
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displayed
 a more dramatic trend but ultimately
didshowsome
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did show
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 recovery by the
year
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 2003. Japan,
although
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 making around 590
million
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dollars
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, the most money
amoungst
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among
 the countries,
in
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at
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 the
start
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 of 1999, did show
slight
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a slight
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 decrease by the time the
year
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 ended.
On the contrary
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, Colombia
making
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, making
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 about 470
million
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dollars
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in
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at
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 the
start
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 of
1999
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1999,
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 displayed a steady upward trend
surpassing
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, surpassing
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 Japan
untill
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until
 the
start
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 of 2002, where there was a decrease in the
income
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 by about 90
million
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dollars
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 by the end of the next
year
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.
On the other hand
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, Myanmar
having
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, having
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 almost no export whatsoever
in
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at
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 the
start
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 of
1999
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1999,
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 made
a
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apply
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800
million
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dollars
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 in just one
year
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 the increase in the export did not make a big margin, it did make an extra profit of 150
million
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dollors
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dollars
 over the next
year
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.
However
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, the
income
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 plunged from the
start
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 of 2001 and suffered a loss of about
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of the money. It did recover 100
million
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dollors
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dollars
 in the
year
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 2003. Ultimately catching
upto
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up to
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 the other two countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, million, dollars, year, start with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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