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The table below shows the average monthly rainfall in two different cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the average monthly rainfall in two different cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table gives information on the amount of
Rainfall
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 experienced by a couple of different cities over
months
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, counted in
inches
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.
Overall
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, Woodsville
experience
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experiences
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 more
rainfall
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 over
a
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the
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year
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 as compared to
BLacksboro
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Blacksboro
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. November and February are the
most rainy
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rainiest
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months
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 of Woodsville and Blacksboro
respectively
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, respectively
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.
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However
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 both experienced their lowest
rainfall
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 in July. Woodville had 5
inches
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 of
rainfall
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 in the
begining
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beginning
 of the
year
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which
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, which
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 went on
decresing
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decreasing
 on an average of 1
inch
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 per month
untill
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until
 it hit its lowest in July, experiencing only 0.75
inch
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 of rain
, the
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. The
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rainfall
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 accelerated here onwards
and
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, and
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Woodsville
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Woodville
 recorded the highest of 6
inches
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 of
rainfall
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 in November,
slighly
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slightly
 decreasing by half an
inch
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 over the next 2
months
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.
Blacksborro
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Blacksboro
 had
their
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its
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 best
rainfall
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 in February, measuring
upto
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up to
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 4
inches
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, starting from 3
inches
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in
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at
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 the start of the
year
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. And
then
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 it kept on decreasing, hitting its lowest in July to just about 0.01
inch
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.
Although
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 it did show
slight
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a slight
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 increase in the following
months
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.
Finally
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 doubled in November to half an
inch
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 from a quarter of an
inch
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of
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in
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 the previous month.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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 there was
more
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a greater
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 increase in the
rainfall
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 by the end of the
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, months, inches, year, inch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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