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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The line graph illustrates
tourist
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the tourist
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 population staying on a Caribbean
island
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 in millions, from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
amount
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the number
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 of people
that
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who
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prefrered
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preferred
 to stay on
cruise
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 ships over
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island
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islands
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incresed
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increased
four folds
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fourfold
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 in seven years
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while
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, while
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 the
amount
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number
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 of those who
prefered
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preferred
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island
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islands
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 had doubled
over
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apply
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. In
total
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total,
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 there are over three times more
visitors
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 on the
Carebbean
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Caribbean
island
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 in 2017 as compared to 2010.
In
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At
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 the start of 2010, most
visitors
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prefered
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preferred
 to stay on the
island
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 itself. There we
approxiamtely
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approximately
,
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apply
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 0.75
million
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 land
visitors
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untill
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until
 2011. Hereafter, they did show a little more interest in land over water, almost
increasing twice
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doubling
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 the population,
untill
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until
 the start of 2015. In the year
2015
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2015,
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 there was
dip
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a dip
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 recorded, falling by
quarter
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a quarter
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a
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of a
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million
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 in 2016,
although
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,
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 it did recover by 2017,
measuring to
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reaching
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 1.5
million
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 land
visitirs
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visitors
. In comparison to the stable trend by
island
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visitors
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, those
that
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who
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prefered
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preferred
cruise
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 had a more promising slope.
Initially
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, about 0.25
million
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 tourists stayed on the
cruise
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.
Subsequently
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, there was a dip and
revovery
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recovery
 of quarter of a
million
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 in the next two years.
However
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, starting from
2012
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2012,
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 there was an
uniterrupted
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uninterrupted
 steady increase in
cruise
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 ship tourism
untill
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until
finally
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,
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apply
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 reaching 2
million
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visitors
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 in the year 2017.
Thus
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, the total
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 went from 1
million
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in
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at
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 the start of 2010
,
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apply
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to 3.5
million
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 in the next seven years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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