The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below present
a
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the
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bookstore maps today compared to
it
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those
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in 2000.
Overall
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, there are some changes between the past and the present, but the most vivid change lies
on
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apply
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outside
of
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apply
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the bookstore. As we can see, in the past there were fences that
were surrounding
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surrounded
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the building,
while
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today
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there is
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is
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are
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none.
Move
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Moving
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to the layout of the building,
there
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it
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were
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was
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more simple
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simpler
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than the present
,
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.
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From 2 fiction rooms in 2000,
then
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divide
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divided
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into smaller rooms
that
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is
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apply
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consist of art, hobbies, cookery, fiction
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, adn
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adn
Correct your spelling
and
non-fiction by now.
However
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, the main area in the middle is completely different, from art, hobbies and cookery shelves,
turn
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turning
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into tables and chairs to enjoy the book from that building. Meanwhile,
non-fiction
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the non-fiction
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room in 2000 transformed into a brand new cafe section,
while
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the rest, which is travel, new books and
servise
Correct your spelling
service
desk
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desk,
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remain the same as
there
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they
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were originally placed.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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