The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The bar graph gives a details breakdown
,
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of the amount of money spent by the people of a particular nation, on necessities and amenities in the
year
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years
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1968 and 2018, comparatively in one week.
Overall
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, food and leisure
was
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were
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the most invested
necessity
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necessities
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in the
year
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years
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1968 and 2018, respectively.
Whereas
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,
very
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a very
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less
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small
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amount of money was used in fuel and power in both
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years,
in addition
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to personal goods in 2018. In
1968
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1968,
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most of the crowd
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paid
large
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a large
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amount of money
in
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food, spending about 35% of their weekly income and chose to use only around 6% for fuel and power.
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20% of their earnings were spent on necessities, like housing, clothing and footwear. Transport and goods had a decent
spenditure
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expenditure
rate. In regards to half a
centuary
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century
later, in 2018, leisure looked like the main area of interest for the crowd, spending a little short of a quarter of their weekly
pay check
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. Followed by housing,
depleating
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depleting
upto
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up to
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a fifth of their earnings in a week.
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, fuel, power and
perosnal
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personal
good
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goods
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had more affordable
spenditure acounting
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expenditure accounting
to
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for
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12%
overall
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. All other necessities were managed in 8%-16% of their pay.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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