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The most important element in a person’s life is their work. Without a satisfying career, life is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 some
people
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 think that their profession is the most crucial thing in their
life
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, others believe that nothing can be more important than
happiness
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, health or something else. If I need to choose one, I will definitely disagree with
this
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 opinion and choose
happiness
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. In my own view, I'm not an unambitious or lazy
, I'm
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person, I'm
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 just a person who
don't
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doesn't
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 like
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to be constrained
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 by anything, don't like any kind of stressful environment. Work helps
people
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 earn money and have stability, but it does not determine the entire meaning of
life
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.
Life
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 will not be meaningless without success
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 it would just make
people
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 feel disappointed. I have read many books, there are lives that have complete success
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 they are never satisfied with that, on the other side, there are
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 lives that are ruined as they still see
life
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 as bright because they have
happiness
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,
this
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 is all the
charaters
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characters
 wanted in their
life
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.
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, too much focus on work can
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 cause
people
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 to suffer from psychological diseases
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 as depression,
imbalance
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an imbalance
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 in
life
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. In conclusion, my work
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also
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is also
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essence
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 in my
life
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but
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, but
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 not the most important thing
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satisfying
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a satisfying
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 career
just
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is just
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 temporary
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. After
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 having
it
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it,
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 I will want more and more. Only
happiness
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 can truly bring human satisfaction
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this
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 is what I was taught since childhood.

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task response
State your view clearly in the opening paragraph and keep it in mind for all points. Add one strong idea per paragraph with a short, real example.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words and connect each paragraph. Try to use a goal, a link, and a result in each paragraph.
grammar
Check grammar and spell a few words. Use short, clear sentences to avoid mistakes.
strength
Your top view is clear: happiness is very important.
strength
You give a reason and a view, not just talk.
strength
You end with a conclusion that restates your view.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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