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More and more parents are allowing their children to play on computers and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion

The number of parents who are letting their
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child to
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children
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use
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 technological devices
such
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 as laptops and tablets
are
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 increasing, because they think children have to acquire
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technology related
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 abilities.
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 it is argued that drawbacks
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 as distraction from their studies outweigh the advantages, I firmly support the view that
this
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 approach can benefit
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child’s
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children’s
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 development.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives and explain my choice. On the one hand, it is commonly thought that exposing children to
screen
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screens
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 from a young age has many negative aspects. They believe the more the
child
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 plays on tablets or computers, the less likely they
will be
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are to
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focused
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focus
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 on their homework. Parents do not think about what
can technological devices
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technological devices can
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 add to the
child
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 in their studies
and
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, and
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 that they are for entertainment purposes only.
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, a study consisted elementary
school
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 students has shown a correlation between owning a personal device and not focusing on
school
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 subjects.
On the other hand
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, supporters
emphasize
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 the major advantage of the
use
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 of
technology
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while
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 studying for
young
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the young
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 generations. Learning through online websites and using web-based sources for the subjects they need additional help
has
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 significantly changed
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child’s
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children’s
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 way of understanding in a positive way.
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,
a
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research done by The Nordic International
School
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 in Sweden showed that the middle
school
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 students who
use
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 computers for completing their tasks have achieved a lot more than those who prefer not to
use
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 any
technology
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.
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, even though it is widely acknowledged that overexposure to media can affect
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child’s
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 improvement in
school
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, I believe that the
wisely
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use
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 of
technology
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 has a lot to offer to a
child
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.

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structure
Plan in the start. Say what you will talk about and what you think at the end.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph and use good link words to join ideas.
grammar
Fix grammar and form. Use correct verb and plural forms.
lexical
Use clear examples and keep language simple but exact.
content
You show both sides and give your view.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence
You use some linking words to move ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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