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In today's time the internet is making it easy to study online from home. Some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. others prefer classroom education Discuss both view and share your opinion.

Nowadays, the internet makes it possible for
students
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 to learn online from
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home. Some individuals think it is better for
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 as it
provide
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 flexibility to them.
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, others
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this
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 notion. They prefer
classroom
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 education because of having face-to-face interaction with
teachers
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 and peers. I personally favour the latter view. On the one hand, online courses offer flexible hours to
students
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. They do not need to stick with a traditional schedule
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 and can study when they wish.
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,
teachers
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 upload recorded sessions on the educational site where
students
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 can easily access
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it
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. If the student has a problem
to understand
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 the recorded session,
then
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 he can use a variety of free study materials on the internet at the same time. By doing
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, he can simplify his learning process
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 and
can
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get better grades in finals.
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, I think online courses are taken by
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 lightly
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 they may lose their interest in
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 when they find
easy
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an easy
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 solution by using
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On the other hand
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,
classroom
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 education provides
in-person
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an in-person
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 experience to youngsters. In the
classroom
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, they can interact with their
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 and peers
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 learning.
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Classroom
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The classroom
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 creates a learning environment
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 where
students
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 can clear their doubts
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 and get feedback from their mentors immediately.
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, children can enhance their confidence and co-operation when they communicate with others
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participation in extracurricular activities or in group projects
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 helpful for the holistic development of
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.
To sum up
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, undoubtedly, online classes have their own pros by
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 features of learning
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such
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 as learn from home, and anytime accessibility. But it can not replace the value of traditional classrooms, which offer direct communication between
teachers
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 and
students
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.
Therefore
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, I believe
classroom
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 education is beneficial over online classes.

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structure
Make ideas sit close to one line. Each idea needs its own place and clear link to your view.
grammar
Fix small grammar mistakes so the sense is clear and easy to read.
vocabulary
Give more real and nearer examples. For online class, show what you can do at home; for class, show chances to talk with teachers.
grammar
Use short, clean sentences. Break long lines into two or three short lines.
grammar
Be sure about pronouns and time. Use ‘they,’ ‘them,’ and ‘it’ in the right place.
stance
Your view is clear and easy to follow.
coherence
You show both sides well and make a fair compare between them.
structure
There is a clear start and end to the essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • class
  • course
  • study
  • home
  • time
  • travel
  • cost
  • access
  • teacher
  • student
  • feedback
  • group
  • work
  • routine
  • screen
  • internet
  • idea
  • mix
  • plan
  • balance
  • benefit
  • problem
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