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Writing Samples
Band 2

some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it. how true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching progammes and films about it? give reasons for your answers an include any revelant exapmles from your own experience?

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 point, the authors lean on Figures 1-4. In 1a-b, IMQ scores only drop away from control when IL17RA is gone in all
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, not just T
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 or myeloid
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. In 2a-d and 2e-g, loss of IL-17RA in keratinocytes lowers back and ear scores
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 the skin is far less inflamed. In turn,
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IL-17RA-nulll
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IL-17RA-null
 mice, not with the controls. In 3a-e, neutrophils rise in control ears with IMQ but stay low in the IL-17RA-null and in the
keratinocytes
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 mice. Still, other white
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 turn up in every group. In Figure 4, control scores are slightly higher than in IL-17RA- null mice.

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task
Your writing must answer the task. Say what you think and give good reasons and easy examples.
structure
Put ideas in clear order. Use a short start, 2 body parts, and a small end.
cohesion
Link many ideas with small words like and, but, so, then to help flow.
example
Give a real example from life or note your own views.
language
Use simple words and short lines to make it easy to read.
data
The text shows real data from the figures.
comparison
It makes clear compare groups.
clarity
Numbers help show change clearly.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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