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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organisation's should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed by some that environmental issues of the globe have become a huge problem
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efforts
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 of an
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individual
 will not make much difference
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this
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 issue should be solved at
international
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the international
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level
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.
While
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 I agree that the
government
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 and
industries
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 should take steps against environmental issues, I believe that common
people
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 should not stop finding
a
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solutions for
this
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.
To begin
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 with, the reasons why
people
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 are in favour of solving environmental
pollution
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 at
international
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the international
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level
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. The main reason is to get positive results.
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,
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apply
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 the rules for saving our
surronding
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surrounding
 nature
would be
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 followed by
all
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apply
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the
nation
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entire nation
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, it would make a remarkable reduction in
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pollution
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the pollution
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 rate. The positive results will motivate
people
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 to make some extra
efforts
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 to
slove
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solve
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this
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 issue.
Furthermore
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, conflicts between countries will decrease. Nations will stop accusing and comparing each other for spreading
pollution
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.
Hence
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, they are
bounded
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 to obey
same
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the same
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 limits. Strict regulation on the
government
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level
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 will bring all
industries
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 on the same page.
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, awareness of the detrimental effects on nature
due to
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pollution
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 could be spread through
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government
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the government
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body
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bodies
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 more effectively. They can show statistical data of earth
pollution
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,
And
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and
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 its negative impacts on human lives.
Which
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 will start a simulation among the public against alarming issues of the
environment
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.
Moreover
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,
people
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 think
that
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is
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if
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a
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an
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 ordinary person
will make
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makes
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efforts
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 to reduce
pollution
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 will not be helpful enough to solve it. As big companies and
industries
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 are more responsible for polluting nature. If they
would
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 not
be
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stopped,
then
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 an individual can not do
any thing
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anything
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 to save
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environment
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the environment
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.
However
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, I believe that a common person should not be demotivated by looking at
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the difference
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 they are making, but they could be an example to inspire others to save
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environment
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the environment
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 for future
generation
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generations
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. Not only
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are government
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government
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governments
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 or big
industries
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are
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apply
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responsible
to save
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for saving
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 the future of human
being
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beings
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, but individuals
also
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 have some responsibilities.
To conclude
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, I agree that one person cannot reverse the damage
of
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to
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 the
environment
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, big companies and political bodies should find solutions to make a
noticable
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noticeable
 improvement. But
efforts
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 at
individual
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the individual
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level
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 should not be stopped completely, as it is inspiring for the upcoming generation.

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grammar
There are many grammar mistakes and wrong spellings that make meaning hard. Fix them carefully.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple and clear ties. Use words like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'however', 'also' to show order and contrast.
style
Keep sentences short. Do not run long. One idea per sentence.
structure
Group ideas in same paragraph. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task analysis
Make your position clear in the first or second line and restate it in the end. Add one or two clear points.
content
Add one or two simple examples to show your points.
content
The writer states a view on the issue.
structure
The essay has a clear start, middle and end (intro, body, conclusion).
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