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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustrations depict the Beechwood
Farm
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 in the
1950
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1950s
 and today.
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, the main layout of the
farm
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 remains the same, but there are several developments that are new on the
farm
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. Previously, the sheep barn dominated the
farm
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, but now it
turned
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has turned
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 into
few
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a few
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 functions, which are
parking
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a parking
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 site,
camping
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a camping
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 field, and
solar
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a solar
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 panels field. The area that used to be
barn
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a barn
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 had turned into holiday cottages near the parking lot beside the solar panels
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 the barn
wasn't
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hadn't
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 vanished, but was moved to the edge of the intersection beside the farmhouse. In the lower area, the gardens of
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and fruits remain the same
,
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.
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 Despite, there is a newly added farmshop near the fruit trees to sell the freshly harvested vegetables and fruits to visitors. It seems that the adjustments made were for visitors to enjoy, probably there were an increasing family visitors for recreation. In conclusion, the Beechwood
Farm
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 has made some improvements to make it more suitable for
recreations
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recreation
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.

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content
Review how you present changes. Stick to facts from the diagram and do not guess the reason for changes.
structure
Use a simple order: first describe 1950, then today, or vice versa, and use clear links like 'first', 'next', 'then','finally'.
grammar
Keep sentences short and easy. Use simple join words like 'and','but'.
content
Present each new idea in its own line or sentence and group similar ideas together.
overview
Clear view of changes from old to new.
content
Name many old and new parts of the farm (parking, camp, shop).
coherence
Some links show contrast between the two times.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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