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Band 5.5

The bar chart shows the level of air pollution in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart presents data on the amount of air contamination in the UK,
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New Zealand, Australia, and the US.
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, it is apparent that the US is dominant
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 in terms of air pollution,
whereas
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 the levels in
other
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 four countries are relatively lower.
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 the diagram, the atmosphere of the US is the most polluted of
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 nations, at 80
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of
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tonnes,
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 the quantity of the UK is identical to that of Australia, at 40
millions
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of
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tonnes. As for the other two nations, compared to New Zealand, Australia's air is cleaner, at about 30 and 35
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million
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of
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tonnes, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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