There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems. Explain how these problems are affecting the public. Suggest some changes that could be made

Dear Manager, I am writing
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letter to express dissatisfaction with the public transportation in my area. I am living in the 31382, Winton Court, the postal code of the area is V2T 6L7. The condition of buses which are coming
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area is quite embarrassing. The mirrors of the bus have broken, which makes it hard for passengers to travel during extreme winter.
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, the trains are full of people, even though it is difficult to travel by standing in the train.
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, people who are travelling face a lot of disturbance
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standing.
Last
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week, a senior citizen got injured
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a lack of space. It seems that if the situation remains uncontrolled, more accidents will happen in future as well. To overcome these difficulties, your company should provide large buses. The mirrors of the buses should be repaired. The handle should be placed at every nook and corner of the bus to assist
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standing. I hope that you consider my obstacles as a priority, I am looking forward
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your response. Yours faithfully, Nisha

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Your letter covers the main points: problems, effects on people, and possible fixes. Focus on one clear plan and give a few exact steps.
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Split the writing into three clear parts: 1) what is the problem, 2) how it affects people, 3) what you want done. Use simple linking words to show order.
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You state the wish to fix the bus issue in a calm and polite way.
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The letter ends with a polite closing, which fits a formal letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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