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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the total
number
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 of shop
closures
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 and the total
number
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 of new shop
openings
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 in one country over an eight-year period, from 2011 to 2018. The figures are provided in thousands.
Overall
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, the most striking feature is that the
number
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 of
closures
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 remained consistently higher than
openings
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 across the period, with the exception of 2014.
Furthermore
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, both trends followed a similar volatile pattern, reaching a significant low point in 2015 before recovering modestly. In the initial four years, the figures for
closures
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 exceeded those for new
openings
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. In 2011,
closures
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 stood at approximately 6,500,
while
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 new shops numbered 7,500. By 2013,
closures
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 peaked at 7,000, contrasting sharply with the 5,000
openings
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 recorded that year.
However
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, in 2014, the two lines briefly converged, with
openings
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 reaching a high of 6,500, marginally surpassing the 6,300
closures
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.
Following
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this
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 brief reversal, both lines plummeted dramatically in 2015,
where
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when
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 shop
closures
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 hit their lowest point at just under 1,000. In the same year, the
number
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 of new
openings
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 fell to 4,000.
Subsequently
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,
closures
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 recovered sharply to 5,000 in 2016 and
then
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 stabilised at that level for the remainder of the period.
Conversely
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,
openings
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 showed little volatility in the final years, maintaining a level around 4,000 until the end of the survey in 2018, finishing at 2,750.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures, openings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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