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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph illustrates the Gross Domestic Product in the four countries: Bangladesh, Pakistan, Nepal, and
Malaysia
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, over the period of five years
ranging
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 from 2010 to 2015. The figures are expressed in billions of US
dollar
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, the data clearly reveals that
Malaysia
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 accounted
to
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for
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 the largest
share
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share,
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whereas
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,
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apply
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 Nepal stood at the
last
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 position.
To begin
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 with, in 2010, Pakistan was the second leading contributor with nearly 190
billion
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of
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apply
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US
dollars
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, followed by Bangladesh's GDP with slightly more than 100
billion
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 US
dollars
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.
On the other hand
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, Nepal had
least
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the least
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 contribution
just
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, just
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 close to 1
billion
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 US
dollars
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.
Additionally
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, in 2011, Malaysians
had
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experienced a gradual increase by reaching 300 US
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dollars
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dollars,
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 followed by Pakistanis crossing 200
billion
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 US
dollars
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. In
converse
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contrast
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, in 2013, the
graph
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graphs
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 for Bangladesh,
Malaysia
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 and Pakistan had
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase close to 150, 210,
310
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and 310
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billion
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
Similarly
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,
Malaysia
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's GDP maintained a clear lead over others with 300
billions
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billion
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 in the final year.
Likewise
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, Pakistanis had
steady
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a steady
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 rise with 280
billions
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billion
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.
In contrast
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, Nepal had minimal fluctuations throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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