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a building company in planning to build new houses on some land near where you live, and has asked the public for comments. write a letter to the manger of the building company. in your letter say how you heard about the building company plan give your opinion of the plan say what you hope the bulding company will do

Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am writing to
speak
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inform
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, that I have
listen
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your
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that your
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company
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 will build
news
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new
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apartment
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apartments
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 on some land near my hometown. I
have
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know
,
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 your
company
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 will build 30
room
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30-room
 apartment and will
construction
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in
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it in
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 the summer next year.
i
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I
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 think
,
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 that it is
easy
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an easy
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 construction, because the weather in summer is convenient. It plays a pivotal role in the
buildings
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building
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company
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company's
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 plan.
my
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 hometown
has
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does
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 not
a
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have a
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park
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,
that
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which
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 people
need really
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really need
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 a
park
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. I have
opinion
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an opinion
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, your
company
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 should build a
park
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. I think
,
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 it is wunderbar to have more customers and it is flexible, convenient for
every people
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everyone
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. What is more, individuals can organized
activities
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sports activities
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sport
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apply
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, running… to relax and discuss with family and friends after
time
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work.
Beside
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it
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, it
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 helps people feel happy and have
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a news
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news
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new
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neighbor
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. I hope
,
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 that your
company
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 will change plans to build a
park
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 in
new
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the new
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 house. What is more, I hope the building
company
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 will build soon complete plan and
development
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 more in the future. Ms
van anh
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Van Anh
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task response
Task response: The letter shows some points from the task, but it is not clear and well laid out. State clearly how you heard of the plan, give a firm opinion with a reason, and say exactly what you want the company to do.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use 2 or 3 short paragraphs. Put one idea in each paragraph. Use simple linking words like first, also, and finally to connect ideas.
content
You tell what you want (a park) and show care for the local area.
idea
You mention the plan and the time (summer) which shows some plan detail.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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