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I| The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015.

The chart illustrates how many international
students
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 studied at a UK
university
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 from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 increased steadily during
this
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 twenty-year period. In 1995, the
university
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 had only
about
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a small
number
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 of international
students
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.
This
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 figure rose slowly in the first five years and reached a higher level by 2000. After that, the growth became more noticeable. Between 2000 and 2010, the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 increased sharply, showing that the
university
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 became more popular among international applicants. From 2010 to 2015, the
number
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 continued to rise but at a slightly slower pace compared to the previous decade. By the end of the period, the total
number
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 of international
students
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 was much higher than in 1995.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
university
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 attracted more and more
students
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 from abroad throughout the whole period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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