The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.

The given process chart depicts the collection of recent weather data that has been recorded by
Australian
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bureau
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Bureau
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of
meteorology
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in terms of
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a reliable
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source.
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, the weather broadcasting has been collected by 3 different sources, after
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gathered
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data is prepared to broadcast by means of different devices, namely radio, recorders and
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. Observing the details of
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, it is evident that the data is collected
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3 ways.
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the satellite photos
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was
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generated by satellites, radar screens by radars and synoptic charts that
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visualized
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by
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a drifting
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buoy.
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these
datas
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data
were analysed and forecasted, before preparing to broadcast. After
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the broadcast of weather
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patterns
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has happened by means of
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news,
record
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announcements, particularly telephones, and radio.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • collect
  • data
  • weather
  • satellites
  • radar
  • stations
  • information
  • conditions
  • analyze
  • predict
  • future
  • forecasts
  • public
  • technology
  • measure
  • temperature
  • humidity
  • speed
  • storms
  • real-time
  • movement
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