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Band 5.5

The bar chart below shows the US' top ten proccesed food export markets for last year and 6 years ago

The chart below shows statistics about
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the valume
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volume
 of
money
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 that
US
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the US
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 earned by exporting food to 10 different countries in
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last
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the last
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 year and 6 years ago.
Overall
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, there are
Canada
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, Mexico,
The
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the
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 European Union, Japan, China, South
,
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apply
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 Korea,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Australia
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,
Hong
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Kong
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, Rest of the world.
While
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Australia
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,
Hong
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Kong
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 and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the least earned
money
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,
Canada
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 and
Rest
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the Rest
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 of the World had the highest exported food in both
of
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times. As the chart shows,
Canada
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 had the
hightes
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highest
 export
last
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 year. At that time the South Korea and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had almost the same
money
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(1.6, 1.2).
Australia
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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was
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were
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 the same too(1.0, 0.8).
On the other hand
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, 6 years ago
Canada
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 had the biggest earned cash as in
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last
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the last
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 year(9.3 ).
Firstly
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,
Australia
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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 had absolutely the same figure(0.3,0.3).
Secondly
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, China and South Korea had similar cash (0.9,0.8).
Finaly
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Finally
,
Hong
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Kong
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 had the least
money
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 6 years ago.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, canada, australia, hong, kong with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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