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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables illustrate the data on sales of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 (in millions of
euros
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) in five countries - the
UK
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,
Switzerland
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium, and
Sweden
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 - in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
Switzerland
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 sold more
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 than others in 1999,
whereas
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 the
UK
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 took the lead for
coffee
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 in 2004.
In addition
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,
coffee
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 experienced rapid increases in some countries,
while
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 others showed only slight growth.
On the other hand
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, a similar trend was
also
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 seen for
bananas
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, except for
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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. In 1999,
Switzerland
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's
coffee
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 sales were the highest, at 3
million
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euros
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, followed by 1.8 in
Denmark
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 and 1.5 in the
UK
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. Belgium and
Sweden
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 remained the least, at just under 1
million
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euros
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. In 2004,
however
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, the
UK
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 rose considerably to 20
million
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euros
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,
while
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Switzerland
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 only increased moderately to 6
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium, and
Sweden
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 grew steadily to just under 2
million
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euros
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.
On the other hand
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,
Switzerland
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 remained the dominant country in
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bananas
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banana
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 sales, soaring from 15 in 1999 to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004. It is notable that
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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 decreased marginally from just under 2
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to approximately 1
million
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euros
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 in 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, bananas, euros, uk, switzerland, denmark, sweden, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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