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The chart below gives information about the revenue of A&V Teach Company from 200 to 2004.

The chart illustrates the data about the income of a digital enterprise
of
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over
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 four
years
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 between 2000 and 2004.
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Overall
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Overall,
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it is clear that
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 the business rose
up
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apply
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over the
years
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. But the ratio of the
sale
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sales
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 of laptops was high compared to other products. The firm was in
loss
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the loss
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at
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for
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his
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its
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 starting two
years
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but
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, but
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their
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its
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 revenue drastically increased in
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last
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the last
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 two
years
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.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 in
2000
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2000,
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 the innovative company just sold the laptops and earned 4
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millions
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million
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, but next year they started to
sale
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sell
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 mobile phones and cameras. The startup company went down and
beared
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incurred
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loss
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a loss
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 in 2002.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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 in 2003, A&V dramatically climbed and reached around 6
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millions
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million
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. The tendency of profit went up in 2004, and reached above 8
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millions
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million
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but
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, but
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 the ratio of cell
phons
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phones
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 and cameras
were
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was
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minior
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minorly
 increased below 4
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millions
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million
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.
Eventually
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Eventually,
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it is clear that
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tech
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the tech
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 firm earns more profit from the sale
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of laptop
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laptop
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laptops
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "it is clear that".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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