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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce consumpation of fossil fuel (gas and oil). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
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gas
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 and oil are very important in our whole
life
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.
Body paragraph 1
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that all our
life
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 depends
in
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on
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gas
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 and oil and we can not live without
gas
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 and
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fule
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fuel
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, there is
also
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 an argument that
opposses
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opposes
 it. In my opinion, I consider that
reduse
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reducing
 for
use
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gas
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of gas
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 and oil
are
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is
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 important to
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guarantee
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continuity in
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 all aspect of our
life
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 that depends on it.
This
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discuss
 both
of
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views.
Body paragraph 2
To begin
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 with,
redusing consumation
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reducing consumption
 of fossil
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fule
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fuel
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, it is important to be aware how
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it will
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 affect
decreacing
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decreasing
 the
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fule
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fuel
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 in our
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life
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lives
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, it will be
step
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a step
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 back in
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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,
incresing
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increasing
 poor and
diffecult
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difficult
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life
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lives
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.
Body paragraph 3
But we can search and learn how we
use
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 the fuel in smart
wat
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water
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 and what the
altrenatitve
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alternative
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to
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 decrease dependency
in
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on
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fule
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fuel
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.
Body paragraph 4
In
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 the other hand, being
non-acceptence
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non-accepting
 to reduce
consumpation
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consumption
 of fossil fuel
not
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is not
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good
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a good
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 idea for the country, we understand the fear of
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 of
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fule
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fuel
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but
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 as I
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, being smart
to
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in using
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use
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fule
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fuel
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.
Conclusion
In
conculsion
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conclusion
,
desipte
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despite
 people having
diffrent
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different
 views, I
belife
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believe
 that
reduce
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reducing
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the consumpation
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consumpation
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consumption
 of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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with
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through
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use
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the use
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 courses and
search
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searching
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 how we will save it good idea to improve and
growth
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 for the country.

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planning
Plan your essay. Make a short plan: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
task
Put your view in the first or second sentence of the intro.
structure
Have a clear topic sentence for each body paragraph.
vocabulary
Use simple and clear words. Check their spelling.
development
Give one clear reason for your view and one counter idea with a simple reply.
cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, but, in addition, for example.
content
You state your view and you try to discuss both sides.
language
You have an effort to use simple words.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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